Songs I've Been Writing

[AlphaWeeaboo]

Well, I have written several songs and would like to post them on here. At the moment they probably are not that good. I still have to improve on the lyric structure and what not but overall they sound OK for lyrics. Anyways tell me what you all think.
WARNING: Most of these songs contain severe depressing themes. Including but not limited to suicide, wrist cutting and depression. Also, don't judge these based on that, I'm fine though, just wrote these up when I was in my mood rage.

The Perfect Way To Die

Love, slowly fading away
Life, losing its meaning
From the moment and on I knew this could never last
And from the moment and on I will never care
You ended it all and left me all alone

Now I wish I was dead just to justify
That our love meant something more
If I could go back I would kill both you and I
As if it matters now I got nothing left
Just this song that I write with fallen tears
Broken hearts and empty beers
The perfect way to die
Just a candle light glow and a bottle of pills
How cliche is that? (What a cliche way to die)
Like our love I guess
Now it's all in my head, there is nothing left to say (I guess I am dead)
Just remember my words as you see me now, I'm dead
Though I am gone my spirit will live on
Maybe I'll be your guardian angel or something better yet

Months have passed and I'm still dead
You're with someone else
My cold lifeless body never meant that much to you
I'll say with a smile and a fist full of pills
That I still love you, dear


Your Only Lover

If I was gone would you still remember me?
All the moments we shared, they were fun for sure
Young at first, a silly romance
To me it was more than that
We can really make this last I would always say
True, I am crazy
But baby this can really last
Hold on just a little longer
Time is slowing down
Just two lovers and the moments we share
Nothing can hold us back
I loved you forever but, darling do you to?
That we will never know, such a complicated question
All I know is that you are mine and I am yours
For now
That's how it used to be
Now things have really changed
It's been days but it seems like forever
Just like our love should have been
In the end it was all a lie
You deny all of that as if it never was
Gone now is our history
Thing could change, maybe dear
You would always say
Now all I can do is pray...


A Song For No One

This is a song for no one (I'll always love you)
You're always in my heart
My everlasting love
You and I were meant to be
Nothing in the world can even begin to compare how I feel
I'm always with you
And you're always with me
No one, I love you honey
When I'm by myself, I'm never all alone
On a rainy day, when time goes so slow
No one, You're always there
No one, you always care
For when the sun don't shine no more
And when my world comes crashing down
Oh, No one cares alot
I'm never all alone
Even by myself
Cause no one is always there
And I am always alone
Just me and no one here
We'll always be forever more
Really true love like never before
And that's all I can say
About my special friend here, no one


The Sun Is Shining And You're Beautiful

A new day, whole 'nother new day
Perfect time to, start again
All my past regrets loom over me
But I won't let that hold me back
Having the time of my life right here
Couldn't get any better than this
Cause the sun is shining and you are beautiful
Such a pretty sight just makes me break
But I'll carry one, the time it still goes
Sunshine, sunshine please don't ever let go
Oh no, it's starting to get dark now
And the sun will be gone
So will you
But I won't worry cause tomorrow is another day
Ain't no one taking my happiness
My pride and glory
She holds that special place deep in my heart
I think I feel a bit better now
Cause the sun is shining and you are beautiful
Such a pretty sight just makes me break
But I'll carry on, the time it still goes
Sunshine, sunshine please don't ever let go
Sunshine, sunshine you are the only one
Sunshine, sunshine
Sunshine, sunshine

I might write more, please leave feedback. Thanks XD

[vinnylord]

go record it i say,   find yarself a band xD

[Simplex]

Well, I have written several songs and would like to post them on here. At the moment they probably are not that good. I still have to improve on the lyric structure and what not but overall they sound OK for lyrics. Anyways tell me what you all think.
WARNING: Most of these songs contain severe depressing themes. Including but not limited to suicide, wrist cutting and depression. Also, don't judge these based on that, I'm fine though, just wrote these up when I was in my mood rage.

The Perfect Way To Die

Love, slowly fading away
Life, losing its meaning
From the moment and on I knew this could never last    Can use this instead of the before moment
And from the moment and on I will never care     Same here, this instead of the
You ended it all and left me all alone          Can remove the second all; unless your going for parallelism

Now I wish I was dead just to justify
That our love meant something more
If I could go back I would kill both you and I   Don't necessarily need the word both
As if it matters now I got nothing left
Just this song that I write with fallen tears
Broken hearts and empty beers
The perfect way to die
Just a candle light glow and a bottle of pills
How cliche is that? (What a cliche way to die)
Like our love I guess
Now it's all in my head, there is nothing left to say (I guess I am dead)
Just remember my words as you see me now, I'm dead  Can use I am dead instead of I'm for parallel structure
Though I am gone my spirit will live on
Maybe I'll be your guardian angel or something better yet

Months have passed and I'm still dead
You're with someone else
My cold lifeless body never meant that much to you
I'll say with a smile and a fist full of pills
That I still love you, dear


I'll probably put up somemore once I get feedback, thanks XD

I put in italics where I thought it could have some structural improvements, otherwise, depending on the tune you are going to, I say that this song is quite well.

[Simplex]

And I'll may my own songs, which may be random and grotesque, depressing and demonic, soulful and skillful, or any of the combinations, since I tend to go off on tangents if I find myself increasingly boarded.

[Hydraa]

Thats one heck of a song!

[vinnylord]

rightyo hydraa XD

[Jorgen]

Needs more PINGAAAAAAS lol no just kidding, looks nice

[Hollow]

Looks nice.

[AlphaWeeaboo]

Hollow replied on my birthday :S

BUMPING
cuz I'm curious and want more feedback on my lyrical poetry plox.
I also wrote up 2 or 3 songs that I'll post up later

[B.E.R.S.~4:20]

Hollow replied on my birthday :S

BUMPING
cuz I'm curious and want more feedback on my lyrical poetry plox.
I also wrote up 2 or 3 songs that I'll post up later

off topic. what does BUMPING mean?

on topic. sounds good and i think simplex had some good thoughts

[Finniespin]

I want you to sing it!

Make the band with like a editor or something. Lots of dudes have a piano or somthing wired up their pc.

Oh Snap! You don't got a pc anymore :/

[Boxman]

I want you to sing it!

Make the band with like a editor or something. Lots of dudes have a piano or somthing wired up their pc.

Oh Snap! You don't got a pc anymore :/

Lol the thought of emo singing is almost eargasmic, but alright.
Go for it. Seems alright, just do it...

[Finniespin]

If we're deaf, then we all know why
Nah srsly, Does anyone knows a good band maker thing they use to have in Imac (apple PC's)

[Dante]

You forgot Fuck, Shit, and hell. Also you fergot TROLLFACE and PINGAZZ!